I love the way you used a language so lush and detailed!
The way you used the term unmarred surprised me,
Not a lot of people know that word.
These lyrics really spoke to me as a beautiful tapestry woven to display the writer/singers story of how she kept strong and tried to keep her heart from breaking. (at least that is how I interpreted it).
A suggestion is to label where the verse ends and where the chorus begins, That would give a clearer image of how the songs supposed to be performed.
Over all I believe this is a wonderful piece of lyrical beauty and I hope to see more in the future!
Sta.sh
The way you used the term unmarred surprised me,
Not a lot of people know that word.
These lyrics really spoke to me as a beautiful tapestry woven to display the writer/singers story of how she kept strong and tried to keep her heart from breaking. (at least that is how I interpreted it).
A suggestion is to label where the verse ends and where the chorus begins, That would give a clearer image of how the songs supposed to be performed.
Over all I believe this is a wonderful piece of lyrical beauty and I hope to see more in the future!