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:iconkiki5764:
I love the way you used a language so lush and detailed!

The way you used the term unmarred surprised me,

Not a lot of people know that word.

These lyrics really spoke to me as a beautiful tapestry woven to display the writer/singers story of how she kept strong and tried to keep her heart from breaking. (at least that is how I interpreted it).

A suggestion is to label where the verse ends and where the chorus begins, That would give a clearer image of how the songs supposed to be performed.


Over all I believe this is a wonderful piece of lyrical beauty and I hope to see more in the future!
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prettywordsalone Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! I really appreciate it! C:

Apparently my spellcheck didn't know the term "unmarred" either. lol
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kiki5764 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
your welcome!!!
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